KARTOFFEL'S BACK!

[kartoffel]

Setting: Bar
Plot: Ryan (Guitar Player) and his band are performing at a bar for their first gig.

Characters: Random Guy - Singer
Ryan - Lead Guitar
Catherine - Rhythm Guitar
Nathan - Drums


He rocked out on his guitar, jamming his pick on the strings. It was their first gig but, it seemed like they had been doing it for years. And right in the middle of Ryan's guitar solo, a gunfire was heard. "Ah!" people screamed. A person in the bar noticed the man with the gun. "Run!" the whole band yelled. The whole band ran outside, the guitar players still holding their guitars. The man was chasing the band! They sprinted as fast as they could. And the band had an idea, Ryan and Catherine threw their guitars back at the man. He tripped and fell, and without getting up shot his SMG at the band, who ran off and never saw the man again.

[Yasu]

Ooh, too cool...it gets interesting almost right away, and then it keeps that interest up. The only dissapointment was that that it ended...

...So in short, I like your style of writing. I'm tempted to say add more detail, but I'm afraid that may alter that style, so your good...

...approved...

[kartoffel]

YAY! I think... am I being critisized or praised?